Monday, November 26, 2018

Ambiguity and Vagueness - Essay




A comment made by a reader of one of my short stories recently was that there was ambiguity in the ending.  In context with the rest of the comment, the person was either trying to be kind or truly meant it as a compliment. 

After cocking my head like a dog trying to fix on a high pitched sound, I decided I needed to consider the meaning of ambiguity.  Which led me to consider vagueness as it seems to be used interchangeably with being ambiguous.  The two words are far afield from one another.

At the end of this, I'll give the link to the story so that if you wish to read it you may.

Through our years of travel and interaction with others and particularly in writing we tend to understand the meaning of things without having to explain the meaning.  I immediately understood that the reader meant open-ended.  But, was that right?  I'm not so sure.  Initially, my operating notion of ambiguity placed the ending of my story at vague, not ambiguous.

I don't know what the commenter had in mind other than what was written.  I thought perhaps it was me that didn't understand.  To some degree it was. 

Ambiguity is a statement that has several different meanings.  All of which, the reader has the option to pick the one they like based on the narrative surrounding it.  The author can only hope the correct meaning is accepted.   Vague means no one has a clue as to what the statement means other than the author.

For example, Ambiguous - "The villain got what he deserved by Joe, Sue or John using a knife or gun."  Vague -"A bad way came to the villain." 

In the first with ambiguous, you can pick.  The villain was punished by one or more of three people with one of two weapons.  The narrative before and after clues the right answer.  Naturally, we don't want to write that way.  But, it happens.

In the second example, vagueness lends itself to all kinds of questions.  What is bad?  A rather subjective word.  It, whatever it is, came to the villain.  Does that mean the villain is dead, wounded, feelings hurt or something else?  We just don't know.  For the author to purposefully write vagueness into his story he or she has to be especially skilled to pull it off.  Must of us write vagueness accidentally.  Here are a few examples of vague words that even context has a hard time overcoming.

He was rich.  Okay, my notion of rich and your notion vary, perhaps a lot.
The man was bald.  What is your notion of bald?  How little hair must a man have to be considered bald?  Is your definition of bald the same as mine?  Probably not.
Middle-aged,
Inspiring,
Beautiful,
Great,
Elegant -  and so on.  These are vague.  Clauses can help but the vagueness prevails.

As I came to refresh my understanding of the difference between the words, I decided my story didn't have a vague ending.  Nor was it ambiguous.  In fact, I wouldn't even call it open-ended.  The climax was reached and it ended.  The reader could infer more about what might follow.  But, the story was over.

That takes me back to the top.  The commenter was just being kind and was not satisfied with the ending.  That gives me a whole different thing to think about.

Thanks for reading.

E.J. Hall


Monday, November 19, 2018

INJUSTICE - Short Fiction


Poison by Victoria Frances
INJUSTICE

INJUSTICE

Skylar pulled open the rough-hewn oak door to the lab and slipped inside.  “Dad?  You here?”

Only silence returned her call.  The cat sitting high on a black lacquered cabinet gave her a cursory glance and licked its shoulder. “Shadow, have you seen my dad?”

“Not here,” Shadow purred.

“Obviously, I’ll take that as a no.”  She rubbed the top of his head.  “You’re right where I want to get into,”

He pushed against her hand as she moved his tail to open the cabinet.

She pulled some vials and read the labels. “Ah, here we are – Arsenic, Arrow Poison Frog extract, Botulinum and a jar of Castor beans.” She set them on the table. The most interesting to her was botulism. Her dad, Rufus, was going to show her how to convert mixture to headache remedy. Ridding the Queen of her migraines had endeared Rufus to the court.

Skylar glanced at the clock hanging on the lab wall. Not like her dad to be late. That wasn’t like him. He was supposed to teach her advanced usage of the poisons.

Alchemy provided only one of her father’s skill subsets. Rufus’ ability to transmute a bag of liquid petroleum, naphtha, burning pitch, Sulphur or quicklime, and bitumen into flame at the touch of water was but a trick of chemistry. Nevertheless, the King thought magic played a part. Thus, the reason Rufus and his family lived in the lap of luxury. 

Rufus taught her the formula when she was a young teenager.  Once he taught her the nature of proportion, she made the mixture easily along with other potions.  Where was he?

She grasped the pentagram necklace and closed her eyes.  Nothing came to her; she wasn’t a seer to the extent of her father.  She only inherited the interpretation of dreams.  There were only a couple hours left before she was to meet her friends at the Inter-Kingdom Tavern. She had already dressed for going out so not to have to change when her dad finished his lesson. Which almost always ran longer than she planned for. Deciding to check his quarters in the East tower she stuffed the vials away trying not to disturb Shadow, but the cat laid down with his paws over the sill keeping her from closing the doors.

“Shadow, please move.”

“Scratch ears.”

Taking the cats head in both hands she generously stroked the back of his ears. “You are enjoying this entirely too much.” After slipping her hand down his sides she lifted him and set him on the floor and shut the cabinet doors. “I have to go.” Skylar said.

She stepped out on to the tan granite floor of the passageway and hadn’t taken more than a dozen steps when Mildred, a serving girl, passed her.  Skylar started to greet her, but the Mildred diverted her eye’s as soon as Skylar was recognized.

Grabbing her arm, Skylar stopped her.  “Mildred, what’s wrong? Are you trying to ignore me?”

“So sorry, Mam’. I did not see you.”

“Yes, you did.  What is going on?”

Mildred looked up and down the passageway.  “Your father has been taken to the dungeon.”

Only the royal couple could order that.  “Are you sure?  Do you know why?”

“No Mam’.”

Dad had told her someday this would happen.  Letting go of her arm, Skylar returned to the lab and pulled out the vial of Botulinum. She pulled off the stopper and noted the level of the thick greenish goop.  Aware of the potency of the spinach created batch, she handled the glass bottle with care. An apprentice of her dad had pulled out the same vial and touched his finger to the substance and then touched his tongue.  The young man dropped to the floor instantly unconscious and died within an hour.  They never understood why he did that; he should have known better.

Rufus told her he had a cure good only for a diluted use of the poison. A dose straight from the bottle was certain death as the apprentice had proved.  

She knew what to do.  After finding tweezers, she pinched a drop of the mixture and scrapped it off into another vial.  She poured the white juice of the grape in to fill the bottle the rest of the way. Squeezing a cork in the top. Skylar shook the concoction between thumb and finger.

~~~#~~~

Skylar found the kitchen as she expected, a bustle of activity with stirring sticks banging pot sides, cooks chopping herbs and helpers slicing thick slabs of ham to stack on a platter. A butcherer dressing out lamb with sharp snapping of his clever never paid any attention to her as she passed.  By the stone baking ovens where a rich aroma a bread permeated the air a bake chef fixed a strawberry-rhubarb pie for the Queen.  Her highness was the only one that would eat the nasty thing. 

“Hello, Penny,” Skylar greeted. 

“Hi, Sky.  You going out?  You’re all dressed up.”  Penny dropped a wad of kneaded flour on a lightly powedered board on the counter and pushed on the spongy dough with both hands.

“Later perhaps.  I see you have the filling ready to go in.  You making the top now?”

“I am.”

“I’ll spoon in the fruit so you can put the top on when you’re ready.”

“Thank you, Sweetheart. If you don’t think it will mess up your nice outfit. I am a little behind. I just have to roll out the dough out and cut it.”

~~~#~~~

Skylar changed out of her evening attire after missing the rendezvous with her friends and sat at her vanity in her room waiting.  The expected knock came, and she opened her door.  The court jester stood in the frame.  The tassels on his hat, the bright reds, greens and yellow of his tunic coupled with the curled-up toes on his shoes belied the worried expression of his white powdered face.

“Yes?” Skylar asked.  “I was about to retire.”

“Mam’, the King summons you to the Queen’s bedchamber.”

“Tell him I’m tired and will come tomorrow.”

“Please, if you don’t come now the King will take my head.”

“You know he would never do that.”

“True, but I don’t want to have a prolonged visit in the dungeon either.” His eyes rounded out. “Ah, oh… I’m sorry. I didn’t mean--.”

“Not your fault.” Skylar leaned in and whispered, “Is it?”

“Oh no, of course not. I promise I had nothing to do with that.”

“All right. Let’s go.” Wrapping a shawl around her unadorned shift against the late drafty corridors of the palace. She snapped the door shut behind her and followed the fool.

~~~#~~~

The Queen was deathly pale, almost matching the whiteness of her pillow.  Her breathing was shallow, and every couple of minutes she doubled up and grasped her stomach.

A personal guard to the king stood by the side of the bedchamber door. The King kneeling on one knee held the Queen’s hand.  Skylar drew his attention as she came to a halt at the foot of the bed.  “An illness has struck my wife.  You will make her well?”

Skylar moved to the other side of the bed and took the Queen by the wrist.  The pulse was racing.  “I cannot.”

“You will, I command it.”

“The Queen has been struck with a terrible affliction.” 

The King studied her.  “Well, what is it?”

“It’s called injustice.”  Skylar dropped the Queen’s arm and stood erect. “Justice floats invisible in the air to alight on those that have done wrong. This is but one form it can take. She will die unless you release my father. Only he can help the Queen.”

The King rose and moved his arm to where his sword hilt would have hung if had he worn it. “You have done this to the Queen.”

“No, you have done this to your wife. Only you can right an injustice of this sort. My father bodes no ill to anyone. He will heal her.” Skylar locked gazes with him without flinching.

Dropping his hand, he turned his head.  “Go release Rufus right now.  Inform him of the Queen’s condition and bid him come posthaste.”

The guard slipped from the room.

“You are right.  I locked Rufus up in a moment of anger.  Although he provoked me, I pardon him.”  King dropped to his knee and took up the Queen’s hand again.  “After your father heals the Queen, this will never be spoken of again.”

Skylar bowed and backed from the room. 

WHAT THE HECK - Flash Fiction



WHAT THE HECK!

What the heck am I doing here? I studied for three years on these systems and for what? To land on an asteroid flying by Mars. What a waste of money," mumbled words by the Captain rambles around in his helmet.
"You say something, Captain?" His radio crackled. "Sounds like your VOC activated, but I didn't hear anything."
"No, I didn't say anything." Not anything you want to hear. "Will you stop doing donuts on that thing and take my picture."
"Yes Sir, I was exploring."
"Exploring What? The damn thing is only 200 meters long and fifty wide. You can see everything there is from right here."
"Captain, do you want to wave or point for the picture?"
"No, for Pete's sake. Just take it. I want to get off this rock," Captain snaps at him.
"Okay, all set. Smile."
"Are you kidding me. Straighten up and fly right, Commander."
"Yes, Sir. Might I ask, did someone slip a firecracker under your thermo-plate or did you get up on the wrong side of the cockpit?"
"Don't worry about it. Just having a bad day. Get over here and pick me up."
"On the way."
"Going my way Captain? Climb in."
"You're starting to tick me off, Commander."
"You going to climb in Sir?"
"I can't. My boots are stuck to the ground." He jerks his legs which are hardly noticeable outside the suit. "Have you been on the surface yet?"
"No. You told me to stay in the rover."
"All right, don't get out. Take the lid off the equipment box and get out a shovel. Put the lid on the ground and step on it. See if you can dig me loose."
Twenty minutes later the second boot came free, and the Captain tumbled into the rover with six inches of asteroid clinging to his soles. "Get the lid and let's go."
"Can't Captain. The lid's stuck."
"All right, get in and leave it."
The rover pitches forward, and the two feel a pop reverberate through the frame. "Captain, Rover’s stuck."
Captain slumps as much as the suit allows. He looks at the Commander. "Just great, now we die stuck to an asteroid flytrap. Just makes my day."
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Mission Control calling Explorer One. Mission Control calling Explorer One.

Silence.

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